"I am a dream-stealer," she exclaimed emphatically to her amused companion.
"Can we have a strawberry tea and an ice-cold lemon tea, please?"
The companion nodded and slowly replied: "I think you are mad, unethical and stupid."
"Why do you think so?" she asked warming to the strawberry tea. "When people can steal ideas, cars and children, why not dreams?"
"Well, stealing ideas, cars and children are accepted as it is the norm but dreams?"
The sun chose her to shine upon thus causing her small diamond stud to sparkle. She took another sip of her strawberry tea relishing it as if it was the most wonderful concoction in the face of the earth.
"You don't know me at all," she argued with her companion who was looking at the baby in the next table.
"Let me tell you, this will never get you far. You will have to face hellfire for stealing people's dreams and you can never be forgiven."
"Why do you use such complex words when you can dismiss this as something silly and simple."
"It is NOT silly and it is NOT simple."
She slowly asked her companion: "What do you understand when I say "dream-stealer?""
"Well, you try to destroy people's dreams by stealing it. Though they don't know it is you who are doing it, nevertheless . . ."
Sipping her tea, she started, "You know whenever people tell me their dreams and I find it so wonderful, I repeat that dream to someone else pretending it was mine. When people are engrossed in my narration, it feels good and the conversation flows endlessly." She stops for a few seconds and continues, "You know this phrase 'dream-stealer' is also not my own."
Sipping the last of the cold lemon-tea, the companion nods muttering "Dream-stealer."
P. S: My first attempt at writing fiction.
wow Ashes.... that is so well written writ with all the right emotions........ beautifulReplyDelete
Hey I am not good at judging...ReplyDelete
But innovative idea and good work as a novice
Good work Susie, keep writing more fiction!ReplyDelete
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i think you did marvelous for your first time...the concept works and is very real...interested in her motivations...why does she have to steal others...does she have none herself or were hers stolen...think you could easily expand this...ReplyDelete
And what an attempt, Susan! I think it's great you've done this... and I think that small pieces of fiction that revolve around dialogue are very enticing... we all want to know what will be said next. Besides, this was an interesting conversation... unique... unusual. I say keep writing... and sharing. No writing and keeping it in the dark! I really enjoyed it...ReplyDelete
I loved this conversation! Very "Alice in Wonderland-ish".ReplyDelete
Stealing dreams, what a fantastic concept, I so wish I were at the next table listening in!
A very sound initiative, Susan.ReplyDelete
Good job :)
I surely enjoyed reading it.
Your comment delights me and makes me feel good. Thanks Ash.
Sweet of you to say that.
It does not matter if you're not a good judge, what matters is that you have taken time to say nice things about the piece. Thanks.
You always say only nice things, don't you. And I love you for that. Hugs.
It's encouraging to receive words as these on the first attempt. I think I can expand. Wow! and how! Many thanks for the time and patience.
You always make me feel good, Nevine. Thanks for that. I am glad that you enjoyed reading this. Conversations are something which remain with us long after it's over. Probably that's what the girl wanted to achieve: A lasting and lingering presence in the mind of the hearer.
Honoured to know that this conversation sounded like "Alice in Wonderlandish." I think now that I can take this further -- life and conversations revolving around 'dream-stealer.'
Thanks for the nice words of appreciation. I am glad you liked and enjoyed this.
GOSH! IT'S BEEN A RUSH OF EMOTIONAL OVERWHELMING.ReplyDelete
THANKS FOR MAKING MY MAIDEN ATTEMPT SO SPECIAL AND BEAUTIFUL. I KNOW I CAN COUNT ON YOU FOR FEEDBACK.
JOY AND HUGS.
Stealing dreams... how novelReplyDelete
This is a wonderful piece of writing, Susan. The dialogue is electric and engaging, and your words maintain an enticing mystery that left me wanting more.ReplyDelete
Happy to get this review on the very first.
Thanks for your kind words. I'm happy to know that this piece struck a chord. Smiles :)
For a first attempt, this is amazing. But, I think it'd be better if you stressed more in the characters and feelings within the conversation. Also, I think adding vibrant description to the place they were sitting would help the readers get a better image of the words. Other than that, I think the idea of the story is new, fresh and brilliant!ReplyDelete
Thanks for the invaluable suggestions and insights. I needed to hear something like this to carry on. I appreciate you time and patience.
Joy always :)
There is no better schemeReplyDelete
than stealing other's dream
thats why you can post without seam
like a never ending perennial stream.
Suggested reading "Dream Catcher" by Stephen King.
At last! Where were you all this while. Busy to bits.
Thanks for the comment and the book suggestion.
Sweeeet!!! I really enjoyed reading it Susan :)ReplyDelete
As i keep saying (:P) you have a way with words!
way to go and I hope we get to read more!
Loads of love
and bestest regards
Dear Ruchi, How generous are you with appreciation. Thanks for that. Hope your week was well. Have a wonderful weekend.ReplyDelete